When a book like Silver Fire has to juggle three over-the -top Alpha males (Derek, Jack and Viktor) and then some, I can’t help but use the word “growled” in a lot of dialogues. How else can you say:
“You’re mine!” he growled.
However, my editor has a point, I did a word count for “growled” in Silver Fire and I cringed at the sheer amount of growling by my heroes; they’re not werewolves after all. 😉
So before I start editing, I write a a list of word alternatives. Sometimes when you’re on a roll, you can’t pull that best word out of your mouth, but you would hate disrupting the flow of the prose—you soldier on. I guess, that’s the type of writer I am. It’s when you finesse your story (and after you’ve read it a couple of times) that the elusive word finally makes itself known. 🙂
I also did a word count on the f-word, and it’s well below the average for the genre. 😉 (at least I hope so). I’ll probably clean it up a bit. Incidentally, the may/june issue of writer’s digest has a topic on using profanity and raw talk in fiction. And there’s a topic on cursing well.
The well-written curse is:
*pointed and precise. When you are dropping the word out of habit, you’ve hit the point of “too much.” Hear it, precisely.
*quickly and forcefully crafted. Shape and vary the language you use.
*revealing, both intentionally and unintentionally. Language (that is diction) changes when emotions are charged. But that might be the moment when swearing drops away. Work for the surprise
(source: writer’s digest may/june 2013 issue)
While I’m happily editing away, the short story I promised about Jack and Maia is nicely forming in my head and I will start pounding the keys on that in a few weeks. This will cover the weeks after Beneath the Fire and Silver Fire and will be free on my blog like Murder and Silk.
In the meantime, happy reading! 🙂